What do you think of my persuasive argument writing piece?
It’s supposed to be a feature article..
i think it ***** …and i think my english teacher is going to despise it too.
here it is:Stop Commercialism now
How many times have you surfed on the internet and not found yourself to come across many ads that have popped up on the page you were on or are on? Many advertisers are profiting from what reels us in, which are these many ads you hear or see on the TV, radio, internet, etc. All in all, it’s a two-sided affair. Say you are just checking your email and you see a thousand emails. Possibly, half of those are spam from those penny-pinchers out to get you and your money. So what should you do about this? Well, you have one of two options being the check all and delete button or moving all that unnecessary junk to the spam folder where it belongs and needs to stay. Commercialism is vastly becoming a problem not a success as many assume it to be.
Studies show that 67% of teens buy items online and 37% of children do. Commercialism attacks the adolescent ages because they figure we are susceptible to any commerce that they are willing to throw at us. Also, many individuals assume this to be a more convenient way of purchasing anything and it being a faster way. That may be, but how do you know you are actually getting what you paid for? You’re wasting your precious time behind a glass screen. Purchase the more effective way, by going out into stores and getting what you need.
Many politicians use commerce for their campaigns. You know those TV ads that always contradict that you need to vote for so and so for president instead of the other guy because he did whatever? This is a way of a scam to get money out of your pockets and into their hands. These ads are the ones that are appealing to hear or see, just an easier way to pull you in.
Commercialism also costs too much money. Most of which is probably our tax dollars. The price goes up for a product if realized that it makes a certain individual sustain a cool image by using it or buying it. Many of these can be misleading, so any time you are gullible to believe one you are giving away money that could be used for something more important.
Advertising takes up a lot of one’s time. We only have one life to live right? The average American spends at least 60 minutes reading, hearing or even watching ads on the television, radio, in magazines, etc. By the time that person comes of old age, 4 years of their life will be basically deducted away from under their feet.
Some say that we are immune, too smart, and too savvy to fall for such. If so were true, we wouldn’t know so much of certain brand names, dress a certain way, buy the foods we eat, and our lives wouldn’t mirror the ads around us. In addition to that, we wouldn’t need pop-up blockers, virus protection programs, and firewalls to save us from all this commerce. So ask yourself this, are we really immune to what we see on the TV, hear on the radio, etc? If we really were, we wouldn’t feel the vanity of using these things to get a better self-image to fit in with the way society portrays us to be, which is all the same. It’s kind of a win-win situation at its best, honestly and ironically enough. On the contrary, you are helping yourself out somewhat the same way you are helping out these phony ads.
Sure ads can help us out by providing vital information to us consumers, but there is way too much that we are exposed to. Ads can hide the fact of caring for each other, the environment, and the community. Many ads give off a bad message to viewers. Such as smoking meaning you are different in a good way than everyone else, you’re only cool if you drive a pricey car, and also making us think that you have to be mature to drink. These messages can cause conflict in families because they could or can influence the way a person in that family thinks. This could cause friction because of the choices that family member made due to the advertisement. In that case, who’s to blame here? It all depends on the situation. To blame for 90% of it would be the advertisement because it provoked them to make such a decision and the other 10% being lack of poor judgment and self-esteem that was made better by the advertisement.
So for all this in mind, why do we really need commercialism anywhere? To pay the bills, to help finances, to help make it an easier, better, more convenient way to make purchases? All it does is cause problems. What does it really help? You’re not really earning anything but helping the advertiser earn your trust and money. So next time you fall for one of these, think of all the consequences that won’t cushion your fall. Whenever you see a pop-up that pops up on your screen, click the x button at the top right, whenever you see any junk email click the delete all button, whenever you hear an ad on the TV, radio, or any electronic device turn it off and read a book not a magazine, instead. You can do many things to avo
Posted on August 29th, 2010 in Homework Help |
August 30th, 2010 at 12:09 am
a couple of ideas…. the fifth paragraph if phrased as a question could be a good opener at beginning of paper, it also needs to be clarified early on what type of advertising mediums you are talking about:
“Did you know that the average American spends at least 60 minutes per day? week? reading, hearing or even watching ads on the television, radio, magazines, & the internet? According to ____?, (or “it is estimated that…”) by the time a person reaches their golden years, approximately 4 years of their life will have been spent viewing a myriad of commercial ads.” Although they can occasionally help us find sales, or a special items we need, for the most part commercial advertisements overload us with unwanted masses of sales information which clogs our minds and computers, plus manipulate us with their subtle, manipulative ploys.”
I think this would set up what you want to say in the body of the paper.
A couple more ideas about downsides to ads that pop up on the internet iin particular s that most of them are spyware that has infected our pc by taking advantage of some security vunerability in our systems. Some of these ads also carry viruses which are activated when you click on them.
My thoughts about the message you are giving in your paper… what I hear you saying is there is no use for ads at all, but I don’t think this is entirely true and would be hard to defend or prove. But I do think the trick is to be prudent in the commercial ads we chose to give your time, attention, & trust to.
This is just some random input that you may chose to use or not. I am enjoy writing and am a decent writer, My daughter is an english major and talented writer also. She spends a lot of time reading me her papers and we critique them together. We both enjoy it. I hope you have fun with your writing project!
August 31st, 2010 at 1:47 pm
I am earning pretty good money (about $1500/month)( filling online surveys. There are many
online survey companies but most of them are scam. Here is my favorite one:
They pay like a clock.. And they pay real good :))
Cheers!